Thursday, March 18, 2010

Editorial Rough Draft

Peer edits

Luke Harwell
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes (to add a turning lane on 140th)
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
yes
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
yes
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
yes (relates to my life)
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
yes (chronically)
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
yes
7. Is the writing clear?
yes it all flows nicely

Alec Johnson drew a picture so i am writing on his rough draft what to add

Tuesday, March 16, 2010

Editorials

1. What is a problem/issue that our entire student body (our school, community, country, etc.) faces today?
lunch room prices soaring

2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
they need to make it affordable for all kids, not all families have a high income

3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)
for the school to look and see that some kids cant afford lunches today

4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
-Connect it to the audience
-describe to them what the future prices could be
-use comparsions
-use past school prices
5. How will you motivate your readership to action in your conclusion?
by showing them enough significance to why i decided to write an editorial about this.

6. How will your editorial serve a public purpose?
It can connect to the public of all ages especially for those that are just entering school

peer edits

i edited Peter's and Paige's story

Monday, March 15, 2010

Final Draftt

As graduation approaches for many high school seniors planning for graduation is one of the most discussed topics amongst the hall ways. For many seniors, graduation means done with high school, others it’s an end of a chapter in life as a new one begins. As for myself, it’s just a reminder to myself something that was once and everyday occurrence would soon come to an end.
As senior year began, the anticipation of finally graduating is coming into view. Seniors begin to apply for colleges, our last homecoming week comes and passes, and before you can blink its second quarter.
For my good friends and I, this was when our final year of varsity hockey was set to begin. As the tryouts began, it was a given who was going to be on the team this year and who was not. The season started off with a golf outing with all the team members. It was an event focused on team building and to have everyone get comfortable around with one another. This season was going to be different our team decided, our team motto was “shocking the lake” and that’s what we planned on. In the off season we got most of returning players together and would train and go on runs together as a team. That was the difference we wanted to make for the coming year was that our team was going to be a family.
Unlike last year, our team was not traveling up north to play five scrimmages prior to the season. This season our schedule had us playing our home rival Apple Valley a weekend earlier then when most teams in the state played their first games. Coming into the game we had two of our top players sitting out due to personal issues, but our team was looking forward to starting the year off against the Eagles. We came out in our fresh new white, blue, and black jersey’s roaring to go. Fighting hard through the game we were miraculously tied with the eagles who were pre ranked in the top twenty of the state. With eleven seconds left in the game they put one past our net minder to put us away. Coming out of the game we took out that we were capable of playing with any team after playing a hard game. Later did we find out this game would sum up the conclusion of our season.
As we took more and more strides closer towards our Christmas tournament we couldn’t get anything to go our ways. “It was the most frustrating part of the season” said goaltender Ryan O’shea. We were not only losing our games, but we were getting killed by our opponents. This was not the way we wanted to end our senior year. The Christmas tournament was finally here. Our team traveled 70 miles south to farm town Minnesota, Rochester. There were eight teams in the tournament. We were placed in the top of the bracket and forced to play one of the home teams of Rochester, Rochester Mayo Spartans. This is the time when our team put everything together and got the bounces we deserved. After embarrassing the Spartans ten to one, we were paired to play the second of three Rochester teams from John Marshall high school. This team was not as bad as we thought they were going to be, they came to play and outplayed our team in the final minutes to get the three to one victory. Going back to the hotel after losing that game knowing that our goal of winning the tournament were now out of reach was painful. Instead of sleeping in and playing in the championship game at one, we got shafted and played in the game at nine in the morning. We were matched against the third and final Rochester team from Century high school, this team made it to state the previous year and had a group of highly talented players. Although in the end of the game we didn’t come out on top, we fought to the end and made the game interesting. We came into the third period down by three and played that period like it was our last period of hockey. We made it interesting by scoring three goals, but the panthers of century high school scored one to put it away to come away with the third place trophy. Leaving the tournament our team knew that we played our hearts out this tournament, and that everything that we were working on in practice was finally coming together and we were able to put a couple of complete games together as a team.
The next month our team was scheduled to play against some tough competition. Six of the ten teams were ranked in the top twenty of the state of hockey. Playing in the hardest conference in the state did not help our season to be what we planned on it to be like. Fast forwarding to our section game our season stayed at the same pace that our season began with. Losing to teams one after another, the end of the season was now in sight. Like the Eastview football team we were paired to play the raiders from Cretin. Instead we were playing them in sections, not in state. We came out to play and played the best first two periods our team has played all year and stunned the crowd in St. Paul. If only we could have played like that for the third period. The season was over. Everything we had trained for that summer was now useless. Growing up playing in the association dreaming of playing varsity hockey was now finally here and now gone with a blink of the eye. Sadness, depression, and lost were the words that senior Tony Companion used to sum up the feeling of never being able to play organized hockey ever again. “Playing with my buddies that I have played with my whole life is what I will miss the most” said tony when asked what he would miss the most about organized hockey.
For all the seniors that have no future plans of playing hockey in college will have nothing to do in the winter. My hockey career was now over, and now each winter I will have to look forward to playing outdoor hockey with my buddies. So as Graduation rolls around it is just a reminder to myself that one of the things I loved most was now over. As this door closes, another one opens and that is to continue my journey to college in the fall of 2010.

Sunday, March 14, 2010

Rough Draft

As graduation approaches for many high school seniors planning for graduation is one of the most discussed topics amongst the hall ways. For many seniors, graduation means done with high school, others it’s an end of a chapter in life as a new one begins. As for me it isn’t my cup of tea.
As senior year began, the anticipation of finally graduating is coming into view. Seniors begin to apply for colleges, our last homecoming week comes and passes, and before you can blink its second quarter.
For my good friends and I, this was when our final year of varsity hockey was set to begin. As the tryouts began, it was a given who was going to be on the team this year and who was not. The season started off with a golf outing with all the team members. It was an event focused on team building and to have everyone get comfortable around with one another. This season was going to be different our team decided, our team motto was “shocking the lake” and that’s what we planned on. In the off season we got most of returning players together and would train and go on runs together as a team. That was the difference we wanted to make for the coming year was that our team was going to be a family.
Unlike last year, our team was not traveling up north to play five scrimmages prior to the season. This season our schedule had us playing our home rival Apple Valley a weekend earlier then when most teams in the state played their first games. Coming into the game we had two of our top players sitting out due to personal issues, but our team was looking forward to starting the year off against the Eagles. We came out in our fresh new white, blue, and black jersey’s roaring to go. Fighting hard through the game we were miraculously tied with the eagles who were pre ranked in the top twenty of the state. With eleven seconds left in the game they put one past our net minder to put us away. Coming out of the game we took out that we were capable of playing with any team after playing a hard game. Later did we find out this game would sum up the conclusion of our season
As we took more and more steps closer towards our Christmas tournament we couldn’t get anything to go our ways. “It was the most frustrating part of the season” said goaltender Ryan O’shea. We were not only losing our games, but we were getting killed by our opponents. This was not the way we wanted to end our senior year. The Christmas tournament was finally here. Our team traveled 70 miles south to farm town Minnesota, Rochester. There were eight teams in the tournament. We were placed in the top of the bracket and forced to play one of the home teams of Rochester, Rochester Mayo. This is the time when our team put everything together and got the bounces we deserved. After embarrassing the Spartans ten to one, we were paired to play the second of three Rochester teams from John Marshall high school. This team was not as bad as we thought they were going to be, they came to play and outplayed our team in the final minutes to get the three to one victory. Going back to the hotel after losing that game knowing that our goal of winning the tournament were now out of reach was painful. Instead of sleeping in and playing in the championship game at one, we got shafted and played in the game at nine in the morning. We were matched against the third and final Rochester team from Century high school, this team made it to state the previous year and was a highly talented group of players. Although in the end of the game we didn’t come out on top, we fought to the end and made the game interesting. We came into the third period down by three and played that period like it was our last period of hockey. We made it interesting by scoring three goals, but the panthers of century high school scored one to put it away to come away with the third place trophy. Leaving the tournament our team knew that we played our hearts out this tournament, and that everything that we were working on in practice was finally coming together and we were able to put a couple of complete games together as a team.
The next month our team was scheduled to play against some tough competition. Six of the ten teams were ranked in the top twenty of the state of hockey. Playing in the hardest conference in the state did not help our season to be what we planned on it to be like. Fast forwarding to our section game our season stayed at the same pace that our season began with. Losing to teams one after another, the end of the season was now in sight. Like the Eastview football team we were paired to play the raiders from cretin. Instead we were playing them in sections, not in state. We came out to play and played the best first two periods our team has played all year and stunned the crowd in St. Paul. If only we could have played like that for the third period. The season was over. Everything we had trained for that summer was now useless. Growing up playing in the association dreaming of playing varsity hockey was now finally here and now gone with a blink of the eye. Sadness, depression, and lost were the words that senior Tony Companion used to sum up the feeling of never being able to play organized hockey ever again. “Playing with my buddies that I have played with my whole life is what I will miss the most” said tony when asked what he would miss the most about organized hockey.
For all the seniors that have no future plans of playing hockey in college will have nothing to do in the winter. My hockey career was now over, and now each winter I will have to look forward to playing outdoor hockey with my buddies. So as Graduation rolls around it is just a reminder to myself that one of the things I loved most was now over.

Wednesday, March 10, 2010

Interviews

Interview Questions Tony Companion

What does it feel like to be done with organized hockey?
sadness, depressing, and lost.

What will you miss the most about organized hockey?
playing with my buddies i have played with my whole life

What was your favorite memory from hockey?
Playing in Italy

How will you move on from the game?
Dont think about it, do other things.

What can you do to still keep playing the game?
Play pick up hockey or pond hockey when i go to college next year.

Explain the hardest thing to leave from the game of hockey
Scoring goals in front of a crowd.

What will you do in the winter time?
play pond hockey

What word comes to mind when you think of your hockey career being over?
its over?

Tuesday, March 9, 2010

Interview Questions

What does it feel like to be done with organized hockey?

What will you miss the most about organized hockey?

What was your favorite memory from hockey?

How will you move on from the game?

What can you do to still keep playing the game?

Explain the hardest thing to leave from the game of hockey

What will you do in the winter time?

What word comes to mind when you think of your hockey career being over?

Friday, March 5, 2010

Final Draft

As the cold weather of February comes to an end, one of the most highly anticipated State Tournaments in the state of Minnesota is coming into sight. The Minnesota boy’s High School Hockey Tournament. What makes this tournament stand out more than others? “ It’s because our state is the state of hockey. There are so many young kids that are bound for Division-1 , and a handful of those kids will someday play in the NHL. “Hockey is the sport to play in this state.” That’s Ron Ritacco’s explanation. There are twenty current Minnesotan’s playing in the NHL today including Olympian David Backes who plays for the St. Louis Blues has tallied 37 points this season. Growing up participating in this tournament is a dream for die hard hockey players. The atmosphere of the tournament is “unreal”, says Jon Cobb who moved from North Carolina to Minnesota to follow his dreams of someday playing in the NHL, but now his dreams have changed. As this tournament approaches, some experts say it’s the most competitive High School tournament in the nation, while others like Jon say there are some flaws in the tournament. “Some sections have some tough competition and others have to weak of competition, which results in some teams that are sent home when really they should be in the tournament.” As the 65th tournament approaches the top teams to beat this year include Minnetonka Skippers currently ranked number one and the Edina Hornets currently ranked number three in state. Both won both of their section finals game the other night at Target Center securing the top two spots in the tournament this year. In addition to the tournament there are also others events to look for as well. Right next door to The Xcel Energy Center is the River Center where the Hockey Expo is held. The Hockey expo attracts hockey players of all ages. The Expo is where the entire hockey named brands show off their new lineup of equipment for the next season. Not only is there new gear to check out, but also shooting galleries and Warrior’s world famous “The Barber Shop”. The barber shop is where you can get your hair cut into different designs that promote Warrior Hockey. Hockey equipment competitors find this is the best time to promote their new gear at one of the biggest tournaments of the season. Also there is a ceremony for the announcement of Mr. Hockey, which is awarded to the top senior hockey player in the state each year. “I think hockey is big in Minnesota because of the long winter we have. In addition to that Minnesota has a reputation of having the fiercest competition in the entire nation”, Ryan O’Shea claims. What football is to Texas is what hockey is to Minnesota times two. That’s how big hockey is to Minnesota. There are over 70 high schools’ that put together a hockey team each year. Some schools have established themselves as the top teams to ever play, including Edina, Eden Prarie, Duluth East, Roseau, South St. Paul, St. Paul Johnson, and now St. Thomas Academy . Roseau tops the list with 32 state tournament appearances. Ron says the greatest game he has seen was the championship game in 1989 between Bloomington Jefferson (his high school) vs. Rochester John Marshall, they went into an overtime period it was a fun game to watch it was back and forth all game long and kept everyone on their heels until almost midnight when the game finally ended. As the weather starts to warm up in the month of March, make sure to come and check out the Minnesota Boys High School state tournament. It starts on the eleventh of this month, so stop by if you truly want to know why the game of hockey is so important to the state of Minnesota.

Peer Edits

I edited Luke's and Peter's stories today
As the cold weather of February comes to an end one of the most highly anticipated State Tournaments in the state of Minnesota is coming into sight. The Minnesota boy’s High School Hockey Tournament. What makes this tournament stand out more than others? “It’s because our state is the state of hockey. There are so many young kids that are D-1 bound and a handful of those kids who will someday play in the NHL. Hockey is the sport to play in this state.” That’s Ron Ritacco’s explanation. There are twenty current Minnesotan’s playing in the NHL today including Olympian David Backes who has tallied 37 points this season. Growing up participating in this tournament is a dream for die hard hockey players. The atmosphere of the tournament is “unreal”, says Jon Cobb who moved from North Carolina to Minnesota to follow is dreams of someday playing in the NHL but now his dream has changed. As this tournament approaches some experts say it’s the most competitive High School tournaments in the nation while others like Jon say there are some flaws in the tournament. “Some sections have some tough competition and others have to weak of competition, which results in some teams that are sent home when really they should be in the tournament.” As the 65th tournament approaches the top teams to beat this year include Minnetonka Skippers and the Edina Hornets. Both teams won both of their section finals game the other night at Target Center securing the top two spots in the tournament this year. In addition to the tournament there are also others events to look for as well. Right next door to The Xcel Energy Center is the River Center where the Hockey Expo is held. The Hockey expo attracts hockey players of all ages. The Expo is where the entire hockey named brands show off their new lineup of equipment for the next season. Not only is there new gear to check out but also shooting galleries and Warrior’s world famous “The Barber Shop”. The barber shop is where you can get your hair cut into different designs that promote Warrior Hockey. Hockey Equipment competitors find this is the best time to promote their new gear at one of the biggest tournaments of the season. Also there is a ceremony for the announcement of Mr. Hockey which is awarded to the top senior hockey player in the state each year. “I think hockey is big in Minnesota because of the long winter we have. In addition to that Minnesota has a reputation of having the fiercest competition in the entire nation”, Ryan O’shea claims. What football is to Texas is what hockey is to Minnesota times two. That’s how big hockey is to Minnesota. There are over 70 High School’s that put together a hockey team each year. Some schools have established themselves as the top teams to ever play including Edina, Eden Prarie, Duluth East, Roseau, South St. Paul, St. Paul Johnson, and now St. Thomas. Roseau tops the list with 32 state tournament appearances. Ron says the greatest game he as seen was the championship game in 1989 between Bloomington Jefferson (his high school) vs. Rochester John Marshall, they went into an overtime period it was a fun game to watch it was back and forth all game long and kept everyone on their heels until almost midnight when the game finally ended. As the weather starts to warm up in the month of March, make sure to come and check out the Minnesota Boys High School state tournament starting on the eleventh of March to truly know why the game of hockey is so important to the state of Minnesota.

Wednesday, March 3, 2010

Interviews (FINAL)

Interview #1 Ryan O'shea

Question 1. What does the game of hockey mean to minnesotan's in your mind? In my mind, the game of hockey in Minnesota is like the game of football in Texas, but more important. Minnesota is the state of hockey.

Question 2. Explain why you think Hockey is so big in minnesota. I think hockey is big in Minnesota because of the long winter we have. In addition to that Minnesota has a reputation of having the most fierce competiton in all the nation since the roots of our state.

Question 3. Do you have hockey experience? Yes i do, i have played on the Eastview High School varsity team for four years now and i started playing the game when i was three.

Question 4. What is the one thing that comes to mind when the state hockey tournament rolls around? The hockey expo. That is the big fair type of convention in the River center where all the reps of big hockey competitors promote the new gear for the upcoming season.

Question 5. Will you be attending this years tournament? Like every year, yes i will. As much as i wish we were playing in it this year but i will be in the crowd watching the games on Thursday, Friday, and Saturday.

Interview #2 Ron Ritacco

Question 1. How many high school hockey tournaments have you attended? Over 20, when i was little my father used to get me out of school to go watch them. Now i have not had the opportunity to, i usually try to catch the games on TV after work.

Question 2. Why is the tournament the biggest state tournament in the state of minnesota? Its because our state is the state of hockey. There are so many young kids that are D-1 Bound and a handfull of those kids who will some day play in the NHL. Hockey is the sport to play in this state.

Question 3. Do you think that this attracts other viewers outside the state of minnesota? Aboslutley, not only people that want to watch good hockey, but so many out of state scouts are attracted to this tournament.

Question 4. Whats the biggest rivalry or game you have seen at the high school tournament? I would say the championship in 1989 between bloomington jefferson (my high school) vs. Rochester John marshall, they went into a over time period it was a fun game to watch.

Question 5. Do you think the state tournament will ever change from how it is now? I think it could because none of us can tell how the future will turn out. if they keep the game under control i think it will be okay but its hard to say

Interview #3 Jon Cobb

Question 1. Explain the atmosphere of the Boys State hockey tournament. Its unreal. Its crazy when the Northern teams come down and their whole town comes down to along with their school bands. Also the Edina girls, cause they are always there.

Question 2. What is one flaw in the Tournament? Some sections have some tough comptetition and others have to weak of competetion so the state tournament dont always have the top 8 teams in the state like it typically should have.

Question 3. Will you still watch the tournament as you age? Yes i sure hope so.

Question 4. What team in your mind is always there and that is always the team to beat? Edina Hornets in class 2A and St thomas in class 1A.

Question 5. How many years in your mind has the tournament been around? 70 years

Interview Questions

1. What does the game of hockey mean to minnesotan's in your mind?
2. Explain why you think Hockey is so big in minnesota
3. Do you have hockey experience?
4. What is the one thing that comes to mind when the state hockey tournament rolls around?
5. Will you be attending this years tournament?
6. How many tournaments have you attended?
7. Explain the atmosphere of the tournament
8. Why is the tournament the biggest state tournament in the state of minnesota?
9. Do you think that this attracts other viewers outside the state of minnesota?
10. Whats the biggest rivalry or game you have seen?

Monday, March 1, 2010

Topic and Angle

Topic: Minnesota Boys High School Hockey Tournament

Angle: Why is this state tournament so big in the state of Minnesota?